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高考英語(yǔ)滿分作文名師點(diǎn)評(píng)
在日常的學(xué)習(xí)、工作、生活中,大家對(duì)作文都再熟悉不過(guò)了吧,作文是從內(nèi)部言語(yǔ)向外部言語(yǔ)的過(guò)渡,即從經(jīng)過(guò)壓縮的簡(jiǎn)要的、自己能明白的語(yǔ)言,向開展的、具有規(guī)范語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)的、能為他人所理解的外部語(yǔ)言形式的轉(zhuǎn)化。你所見過(guò)的作文是什么樣的呢?下面是小編整理的高考英語(yǔ)滿分作文名師點(diǎn)評(píng),僅供參考,希望能夠幫助到大家。
高考英語(yǔ)滿分作文名師點(diǎn)評(píng)1
【試題回放】一家賓館新開業(yè),為吸引外國(guó)賓客,希望在互聯(lián)網(wǎng)上進(jìn)行宣傳。請(qǐng)你用英語(yǔ)為其 寫一篇文字介紹。主要內(nèi)容包括:
1.地點(diǎn):距白山入口處500米;
2.房間及價(jià)格:?jiǎn)稳碎g(共20間),100元/天;雙人間(共15間),150元/天;熱水淋浴;
3.餐飲:餐廳(中、西餐),咖啡廳(茶、咖啡);
4.游泳池:全天免費(fèi)開放;
5.歡迎預(yù)定。
注意:1.詞數(shù)100左右,開頭語(yǔ)已為你寫好;2.可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié),以使行文連貫。
Welcome to Baishan Mountain Hotel!
Baishan Mountain Hotel is now open for business.
500 meters far from the entrance of Baishan Mountain, it provides single?person room, of which the price is RMB100 yuan per day and the number is 20, and 15 double? person rooms, with a price of RMB 150 yuan per day. It also provides hot water bath service. You can enjoy both Chinese and western food in the restaurant and drink coffee and tea in the cafe. The swimming pool is open for free the whole day. All these services can bring great convenience to you and are very enjoyable. So come to enjoy yourself!
Welcome to book rooms in Baishan Mountain.
【名師點(diǎn)評(píng)】
本文開門見山,首先點(diǎn)明了主旨。本文的特點(diǎn)是應(yīng)用了很多比較復(fù)雜的句式,使文章比較出彩。開頭使用了獨(dú)立結(jié)構(gòu)交代賓館位置。which引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語(yǔ)從句的`使用也很正確?偟貋(lái)說(shuō),文章句式精煉,是篇不錯(cuò)的滿分作文。
積累卡片英漢互譯
好詞1. provide v.提供 2. convenience n.便利
好句All these services can bring great convenience to you and are
very enjoyable.所有這些服務(wù)都會(huì)給你帶來(lái)便利,并且非常的愉快。
評(píng)析:bring great convenience,帶來(lái)便利。
高考英語(yǔ)滿分作文名師點(diǎn)評(píng)2
【試題回放】據(jù)報(bào)道,7歲的美國(guó)女孩Amy Bruce得知自己身患肺癌(lung cancer)后處于極度的痛苦之中,美國(guó)抗癌協(xié)會(huì)(ACS)決定,每當(dāng)Amy收到一封慰問(wèn)信,就給她增加3美分的.治療款。
假如你是新華中學(xué)的學(xué)生李華,請(qǐng)你用英文給Amy寫一封慰問(wèn)信,主要內(nèi)容包括:
自我介紹
得知的情況
表示鼓勵(lì)
打算為她做什么
祝她早日康復(fù)
注意:
1. 信的格式已為你寫好
2. 信中不得出現(xiàn)你的真實(shí)情況。
3. 詞數(shù)100左右。
4. 請(qǐng)?jiān)诖痤}卡上作答。
Dear Amy,I’m Li Hua from Xinhua Middle School of China. I’m sorry to hear that you got the lung cancer which brought you great pain. But you should realize that you are young and have a promising great future. So, stand up and fight against the disease! I’m sure you will win. It is reported that the America anti-cancer association will donate three cents upon every comfort letter you receive. So I will tell your situation to all my friends and ask them to write to you. In that way, you will get enough money for you to be cured. Hope you can be well soon.
Yours,Li Hua
[名師點(diǎn)評(píng)]
本文依照要求,涵蓋了所有要點(diǎn)。文章使用了高中常見的句式,如I?m sorry to hear that..., It is reported that...等,都比較好。作者對(duì)定語(yǔ)從句的使用恰到好處地修飾了文章,行文自然而通順,值得學(xué)習(xí)。
積累卡片
好詞1.realize v.意識(shí)到2.promise v.允諾3.donate v.捐贈(zèng)
好句1、I?m sorry to hear that you got the lung cancer which brings you great pain.
我很遺憾地得知你身患肺癌,給你帶來(lái)了巨大的痛苦。
好處:which引導(dǎo)限制性定語(yǔ)從句。
2、So, stand up and fight against the disease!
因此,堅(jiān)強(qiáng)地與疾病做斗爭(zhēng)吧!
好處:擲地有聲,語(yǔ)言準(zhǔn)確。
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