SAT作文修改示例及高分突破

　　下面是一篇學(xué)生寫的SAT作文，這是20xx年10月的SAT作文真題，文章題目是Is it necessary to question the authority?作者寫的是關(guān)于黑人爭奪民權(quán)的問題，就此我們考慮文章中要細(xì)化的內(nèi)容。

　　Authority--- who? 本文是the white people

　　Question the authority--- why? How?

　　Result ---

　　學(xué)生文章分析

　　這道SAT作文真題的開頭段：

　　1Every person makes mistakes, as well as the authority. 2Thats why it is important to insist your own idea when authority is wrong. 3Development of peoples society is usually associated with challenging the authority.

　　問題：句一太松散;句二詞組誤用，缺定冠詞;句三和句二之間有些跳躍，意思上理解應(yīng)該是挑戰(zhàn)權(quán)威的結(jié)果;首段缺少明確的觀點(diǎn)和對下文的提示。

　　修改：1 I cannot agree more with the saying, 2for the authority, like common people, are likely to make mistakes or act unreasonably on some occasions. 3At that moment, the public is supposed to, at the risk of offending the authority, insist on his own belief for the further development of the society. 4Next I will take the example of __Rosa Park_____ to illustrate/substantiate my point.

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